Hwnic/For the Future: Difference between revisions

(One intermediate revision by the same user not shown)

Line 18:

Fdnireq b launt nr xanemedls xoqor

ti Oratnion u cnadil poveil farig lne v geulbiz

alaindup ti pimut afadosebrfn ~~ivndizmuc³~~

alaindup ti pimut afadosebrfn ivndizmuc

Opmbo niva ceimautrlimac sngescuer

trcarn ldud nr jelnrkn gusifdem b icadcti ndogu

Suitti quriscererpe nr ersnt tifevtir

Suitta ti sojitifobaenli micam cl odn ~~xastipn⁴~~

Suitta ti sojitifobaenli micam cl odn xastipn³

Siqlaxhertilcfe ge tini gusxadirmir snter

qasl u eidasene zamaqn mapintokbasne t luem

Line 28:

Mxacolg cist dlxng lsvo v xa vu bim¹

~~indef.~~ spider ACC fractal-translucent appos. ~~complex_web~~-infinite spin.3N PRES.CONT

spider ACC fractal-translucent appos. web-infinite spin.3N PRES.CONT

-

and city late_autumn DAT storm-winter-first appos.-to_be await.3N

cross-section GEN water-opaque LOC suspending-headspace hang.3N

REL wheels-neon ACC trend ride.PRES.IPFV (appos.) downturn economy

Line 43:

A spider endlessly spins a fractalic web

in the ?? late-autumn ~~warmth waiting for~~ the first winter storm.

in the late-autumn city that awaits the first winter storm.

The cross-section of ?? water hang above;

The cross-section of cloudy water hang above;

here I ~~[together~~ with many others], on wheels of neon~~, ride~~ the trend of economic downturn

here I, with many others, ride on wheels of neon the trend of economic downturn

clutching an electron gun to make a diffraction of someone's face.

Against the sky where birds rot away mid-flight,

we used to dine at the end of the waves, inside walls of fused blades.

Before that it [this place] was a painted-over gate where a homeless man spent his days and nights,

and before that relaxed diners [I remember] from my childhood, but ~~once they closed~~ the city ~~forgot about~~ them.

and before that relaxed diners [I remember] from my childhood, but the city has since forgotten them.

~~All~~ the fervent surveillence cameras turn to one point ~~now~~ in the plastic arena;

Now all the fervent surveillence cameras turn to one point in the plastic arena.

~~under the old sun,~~ pain has no significance outside the brain.

Nobody will answer cries for help; here pain has no significance outside the brain.

As easy music drowns out the dying wailing around me,

I shut my ~~mass-produced~~ eyes and connect the dots: one, two, three.

I shut my eyes and connect the dots: one, two, three.

¹ I wrote this text to show how a language designed to be precise can be made blurry. I think (and hope) I don't have the ability to predict the future.

² ~~For the pronunciation of ''Fractlcilinu v uqcari'', recall that the apposition particle ''v'' is palatalized.~~

² An electron emitter used in diffraction demonstrations

~~uqcari: uq- "of the mind", -cari "network", contraction of ''carsapi''~~

³ When these relaxed diners I mention here still existed, the PST.PFV form of Hwnic verbs was to suffix -''pn'', part of a deprecated system now superseded with auxiliary verbs.

³ An electron emitter used in diffraction demonstrations

⁴ When these relaxed diners I mention here still existed, the PST.PFV form of verbs was a suffix -''pn'', part of a deprecated system now superseded with auxiliary verbs.

</pre>

== Notes ==

* Pronunciation is an obstacle, as always:

* ''Fractlcilinu v uqcari'' is [fr&ct@lc5IlInu2 7v(j){ELISION}uq(nar)carI], recall that the apposition particle ''v'' is palatalized.

* ''trcarn ldud'' is [t4caa(~)Rl(~)du2D].

* uqcari is ''uq''- "of the mind" and -''cari'' "network", contraction of ''carsapi''.

@@ Line 18: / Line 18: @@
 Fdnireq b launt nr xanemedls xoqor
 ti Oratnion u cnadil poveil farig lne v geulbiz
-alaindup ti pimut afadosebrfn ivndizmuc³
+alaindup ti pimut afadosebrfn ivndizmuc
 Opmbo niva ceimautrlimac sngescuer
 trcarn ldud nr jelnrkn gusifdem b icadcti ndogu
 Suitti quriscererpe nr ersnt tifevtir
-Suitta ti sojitifobaenli micam cl odn xastipn⁴
+Suitta ti sojitifobaenli micam cl odn xastipn³
 Siqlaxhertilcfe ge tini gusxadirmir snter
 qasl u eidasene zamaqn mapintokbasne t luem
@@ Line 28: / Line 28: @@
 Mxacolg cist dlxng lsvo v xa vu bim¹
-indef. spider ACC fractal-translucent appos. complex_web-infinite spin.3N PRES.CONT
+spider ACC fractal-translucent appos. web-infinite spin.3N PRES.CONT
--
+and city late_autumn DAT storm-winter-first appos.-to_be await.3N
 cross-section GEN water-opaque LOC suspending-headspace hang.3N
 REL wheels-neon ACC trend ride.PRES.IPFV (appos.) downturn economy
@@ Line 43: / Line 43: @@
 A spider endlessly spins a fractalic web
-in the ?? late-autumn warmth waiting for the first winter storm.
+in the late-autumn city that awaits the first winter storm.
-The cross-section of ?? water hang above;
+The cross-section of cloudy water hang above;
-here I [together with many others], on wheels of neon, ride the trend of economic downturn
+here I, with many others, ride on wheels of neon the trend of economic downturn
 clutching an electron gun to make a diffraction of someone's face.
 Against the sky where birds rot away mid-flight,
 we used to dine at the end of the waves, inside walls of fused blades.
 Before that it [this place] was a painted-over gate where a homeless man spent his days and nights,
-and before that relaxed diners [I remember] from my childhood, but once they closed the city forgot about them.
+and before that relaxed diners [I remember] from my childhood, but the city has since forgotten them.
-All the fervent surveillence cameras turn to one point now in the plastic arena;
+Now all the fervent surveillence cameras turn to one point in the plastic arena.
-under the old sun, pain has no significance outside the brain.
+Nobody will answer cries for help; here pain has no significance outside the brain.
 As easy music drowns out the dying wailing around me,
-I shut my mass-produced eyes and connect the dots: one, two, three.
+I shut my eyes and connect the dots: one, two, three.
 ¹ I wrote this text to show how a language designed to be precise can be made blurry. I think (and hope) I don't have the ability to predict the future.
-² For the pronunciation of ''Fractlcilinu v uqcari'', recall that the apposition particle ''v'' is palatalized.
+² An electron emitter used in diffraction demonstrations
-uqcari: uq- "of the mind", -cari "network", contraction of ''carsapi''
+³ When these relaxed diners I mention here still existed, the PST.PFV form of Hwnic verbs was to suffix -''pn'', part of a deprecated system now superseded with auxiliary verbs.
-³ An electron emitter used in diffraction demonstrations
-⁴ When these relaxed diners I mention here still existed, the PST.PFV form of verbs was a suffix -''pn'', part of a deprecated system now superseded with auxiliary verbs.
 </pre>
+== Notes ==
+* Pronunciation is an obstacle, as always:
+* ''Fractlcilinu v uqcari'' is [fr&ct@lc5IlInu2 7v(j){ELISION}uq(nar)carI], recall that the apposition particle ''v'' is palatalized.
+* ''trcarn ldud'' is [t4caa(~)Rl(~)du2D].
+* uqcari is ''uq''- "of the mind" and -''cari'' "network", contraction of ''carsapi''.